I wrote this probably 3 weeks ago. I poked into it tonight to edit a stanza around and about to make it flow better. All in all I think it works out okay, but it feels a little crowded, like the words are crumbling into your mouth and you can't get all of them out. The rhythm is a little off in a few places, but I can't quite fix them all.
Been listening to a lot of Kanye West recently, so it's coming out in beats.